The introduction of this piece did a really great job giving a background information. I feel like the first paragraph used a lot of pathos and it really felt to click with me. The introduction was a bit difficult to grasp at first personally for me because of the way they wrote. This essay was very well written with very few bumps in the road. It was very heavy in factual information but giving personal opinions from the writer made it THAT much better. The first person point of view came and gone a couple of times so at times it lacked in consistency. Nonetheless, the way she connected all her points together in harmony really gave her high credibility in my opinion because of the knowledge she seemed to grasp on this particular subject with the US military and HIV/AIDS.